I’m working on the intrigue factor of my first line for Substance of Shadows.
Which of these lines makes you want to read further? And why? And yes, a possible answer could be that none of them excite, which means I have more work to do. I am also interested in your reaction solely on the line. You shouldn’t need to know the story. You should just want to read more based on the first line.
1. Tonight, the choice Stephanus made would determine the future of his soul.
2. To damn or be damned, possibly both.
3. Bruised knuckles and blood on his fist wasn’t a good start to his new destiny.
4. There wasn’t much light left in his soul after all this, but there was enough.
5. Errol had the girl. Why shouldn’t Stephanus have the demon?
6. For once, he was going to win.
7. Stephanus thought the choice was going to be clear, but it was as muddled as everything else.
Thank you for your feedback.
Catherine
Numbers 1 and 2, in reverse order, are my favorites by a long stretch.
And I like 4, 5 and 6, in that order.
3 is my first choice, followed by 5. I can see we’re not exactly narrowing it down here 😉
Number 2, for sure.
4, 2, and 1 in that order.
Five.
Then again, I’m horrible at beginnings.